tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30940155.post116362278554918516..comments2023-11-05T01:35:11.677-07:00Comments on A Yarning to Write: Me me me...oh crap...not just me...Amy Lanehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04885706951931450373noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30940155.post-73412251003928236692007-01-20T09:50:00.000-08:002007-01-20T09:50:00.000-08:00I am currently reading Tigana...I am currently reading Tigana...Catiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02422312014288178089noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30940155.post-1163799275590633142006-11-17T13:34:00.000-08:002006-11-17T13:34:00.000-08:00It would bug me to look at a whole book full of ."...It would bug me to look at a whole book full of <BR/><BR/>." H<BR/><BR/>instead of <BR/><BR/>," h<BR/><BR/>Sorry, but I had to say it. I am, however excessively anal. Even my blog is about butts.<BR/><BR/>However, if I thought you had decided to do this as a conscious, stylistic, artistic device, I would get over myself and live with it so your post begs the question, "Did you mean to do that?" If you can say yes with honesty, then leave your manuscript as is.Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13564002870593763425noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30940155.post-1163739574679764442006-11-16T20:59:00.000-08:002006-11-16T20:59:00.000-08:00Yeah, the paralegals are correct, but it's your la...Yeah, the paralegals are correct, but it's your labor of love. It's another one of those things. I've mentioned them before, the typos and idiosyncratice errors that make the stories yours. I would change it if the work were mine, but I'm THAT anal. Change it if it bothers you. If it makes more sense to you to use a period for emphasis, then do so. And your chonis are safely hidden under your pants.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30940155.post-1163718735255123542006-11-16T15:12:00.000-08:002006-11-16T15:12:00.000-08:00needletart and rae both make excellent suggestions...needletart and rae both make excellent suggestions. I don't mind the comma use - I mentally switch things over anyhow when I read. I punctuate the way the paralegals would. I do not, however, feel that your writing looks ignorant because of your comma. Perhaps oddly, I was stuck on the word "rawly." I was thinking, is it 'really'? or is the guy's name Rawley? or what? But if you're wondering if you've looked like you're wearing your underwear on the outside, the answer is no.<BR/><BR/>(stopped by because I found your comment on Yarn Harlot so beautiful. so--hey! lovely comment on Yarn Harlot!)Lizhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17018163887117725118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30940155.post-1163700387959485972006-11-16T10:06:00.000-08:002006-11-16T10:06:00.000-08:00I'm not a writer, but an avid reader. I immediate...I'm not a writer, but an avid reader. I immediately thought the same thing you did. It is meant to be emphatic, and the period makes it so. I assume it's a man who is speaking? IF so, that's how a man would say it. Not you. I say leave it. Not all dialogue is spoken in perfect english, so it shouldn't have to be written that way either. Just my two cents.Yeah Sohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03989848317356232631noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30940155.post-1163697389060141042006-11-16T09:16:00.000-08:002006-11-16T09:16:00.000-08:00(and technically, the second one with the comma is...(and technically, the second one with the comma is correct. Technically. But it could also be <BR/><BR/>"Not you." He said rawly, "Risking you is no longer an option."<BR/><BR/>But again, creative license ...)Raehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02255913758088921326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30940155.post-1163694238926531352006-11-16T08:23:00.000-08:002006-11-16T08:23:00.000-08:00I have one word for you: Saramago(Do you know his ...I have one word for you: <BR/><BR/>Saramago<BR/><BR/>(Do you know his writing style?)<BR/><BR/>Tell the paralegals to go fuck themselves. Period. <BR/><BR/>(I'm not an expert, but I did get a BA in English and LOVE grammar. In your case, you're writing fiction. You're not writing a legal document. You have creative license.)<BR/><BR/>Fuck themselves. <BR/>Period.Raehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02255913758088921326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30940155.post-1163692180969645502006-11-16T07:49:00.000-08:002006-11-16T07:49:00.000-08:00How about "Not you!" he said rawly. "Risking you i...How about "Not you!" he said rawly. "Risking you is no longer an option."? Just a couple of years ago I had to take an English grammer course (to get a Medical Assistant's certification, and I hated every minute. Have you ever had a teacher tell you, "Sit down and shut up, you're just confusing the class when you try to apply what I teach." But I digress) and the teacher (aside from some personal issues) was really through. Yesterday, I rewrote a first grade writing 3(!) times to make sure the construction was parallel and that we used the order words correctly. Can I tell you how excited I was when I got it right? Sick, sick, sick.NeedleTarthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13918009777760522295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30940155.post-1163688734190930162006-11-16T06:52:00.000-08:002006-11-16T06:52:00.000-08:00I make the same mistake all the time and edit it o...I make the same mistake all the time and edit it out all the time. The comma is still accepted usage, and you don't want to look like an illiterate to your reading public. This is why I get someone else to read over and edit my work for me. I fall into the story and loose track of the punctuation. There's alwaays another scene or sentence that could use just a little more polish . . .roxiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14916948065233137971noreply@blogger.com